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标题: 【5月14日雅思写作7.5分原创范文】 [打印本页]

作者: IELTS哥 时间: 2011-5-15 19:02
标题: 【5月14日雅思写作7.5分原创范文】
都知道这次写作的题目很变态，以致很多烤鸭考完之后怨声载道

此次写作的范文由@郑仁强原创考过的同学可以来看看这位老师怎么写的，再来对比下自己的写法有何种不同

首先来看下2011年5月14日雅思大作文题目回忆

Individual selfishness and greed has been the basis of modern society. But some people think that we should return to older and traditional values of respect for family and local community in order to create a better world to live in. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

现代社会的人自私，贪婪，我们是否要回到以前的社会？这个题目也是相当的变态呀~~下面是范文，大家仔细看看，必要的时候要好好的揣摩哦~~

It has been thought that selfishness and greed deeply rooted in human nature have provided incentives for the development of modern society. However, in the pursuit of higher and faster social development, a number of traditionally-held beliefs are lost as a result. Obviously, we are caught in such a dilemma whether it is justified for us to revive our respect for traditional values such as family and local community so as to make the world a better place.

Traditional values include a series of moral codes and conceptions formed by our ancestors who have thrived for centuries in the same place. This means that those experiences learnt from so many historical events of life and death can provide us with guidance and orientation about the present. If we attach sufficient importance to family and local community valued by our society for thousands of years again, we will probably be able to regain happiness and enjoyment which are lost in our desperate efforts to seek economic success and economic development. Individuals’ desires will never be satisfied completely, because another desire will always appear when one is diminished. Family and local community are definitely perfect places where we can find comfort and encouragement, especially when we are exhausted by faster pace of life and fierce competition in modern society. If we go back to the old times when we put family and local community in the centre of our life, it will put our lifestyle and life itself on the right rail.

Nevertheless, there is high possibility that family and local community will fail to provide the ultimate solution to individual greed and selfishness. Scientific research indicates that greed and selfishness are determined by human genes, so the ignorance of family and local community is not the key factor for individual selfishness and greed. So many corrupted officials (who have been sent into prison) in China confessed that they made embezzlements in order to satisfy the increasing desires of their families. For the purpose of achieving a “happier” and more stable family bond, some officials even risk their lives to seek illegal profits for their sons, daughters or other family members. Furthermore, concentrating too much on one’s own community may remove its citizens from more important issues like human rights and global environment. Nowadays, the whole human kind is confronted with the danger of natural resources loss and nuclear weapons, but only by international cooperation and mutual understanding between different societies can such problems be resolved efficiently. The concept of “local community or nation state” is losing its importance at a rapid speed, but “global village” and “international community” are gaining momentum instead. Therefore, only focusing on local community will be a futile attempt to pursue further development and welfare.

Evidently, returning to older and traditional values may serve no useful purpose for achieving a happier and sustainable society. Also, respect for family and local community is not an effective antidote for reforming human selfishness and greed. It seems that the present social values shaped by modern industrialization cannot be reversed in the short term. However, it is still possible that people will treasure the concept of family and local community if modern civilization reaches a end some day.

注意：

范文部分为新东方郑仁强原创，转载请注明出处。
出处：http://blog.sina.com.cn/s/blog_4f7a1d290100tur9.html

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作者: YeatsTT 时间: 2011-5-15 19:05
写的很好！话说这题目是很变态的。。。

作者: 微博评论 时间: 2011-5-15 20:32
简直就是大变态，引诱大家托题

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作者: 微博评论 时间: 2011-5-15 20:32
强哥V5啊。。广告都到这儿了[奥特曼]

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作者: 微博评论 时间: 2011-5-15 20:32
[泪] 我要哭死了～～～下个月11号还要考～～～害怕死没时间了！

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作者: 微博评论 时间: 2011-5-15 20:32
7.5作文，想都不敢想

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作者: 微博评论 时间: 2011-5-15 20:32
看完后,表示对拿7.5作文的同志们表示敬佩！

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作者: 微博评论 时间: 2011-5-15 20:32
转发此微博:真欣慰，原来不只我觉得变态

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作者: 微博评论 时间: 2011-5-15 20:32
什么變態題目!!!

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作者: 微博评论 时间: 2011-5-15 20:32
要是大家都写得不好，会不会分数相对来打。。。雅思有没有标准分

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作者: 丁小呆 时间: 2011-5-15 21:34
cool~~

作者: 微博评论 时间: 2011-5-15 22:04
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作者: 微博评论 时间: 2011-5-15 22:04
转发此微博:M

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作者: 微博评论 时间: 2011-5-15 22:04
回复@抹晴:没有标准分的。

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作者: 微博评论 时间: 2011-5-15 22:04
我写的跟他完全不同，判断不了我跑题了没……

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作者: 微博评论 时间: 2011-5-15 22:04
这道题目太变态了，以至于逼我把写英美文学评论的架势都拿了出来，故而文章写的比较抽象，语言难度比较高超，可模仿性便低了一点。其实我个人觉得，这篇范文给7.5都低了，应该拿8-8.5才对。大家凑活看吧，反正暂时网络上你也搜不到更好的了，我只好夜郎自大，欢迎同行写篇更好的来PK哈

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作者: 微博评论 时间: 2011-5-15 23:35
强哥都说变态了...我平衡了...这坑爹的题目

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作者: 微博评论 时间: 2011-5-15 23:35
superb!

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作者: 微博评论 时间: 2011-5-15 23:35
//@郑仁强：这道题目太变态了，以至于逼我把写英美文学评论的架势都拿了出来，故而文章写的比较抽象，语言难度比较高超，可模仿性便低了一点。其实我个人觉得，这篇范文给7.5都低了，应该拿8-8.5才对。大家凑活看吧，反正暂时网络上你也搜不到更好的了，我只好夜郎自大，欢迎同行写篇更好的来PK哈

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作者: 微博评论 时间: 2011-5-15 23:35
讲到几个语言测评的标准：其中有两条是validity和reliability。这次的雅思作文恰好可以作为权威考试中这两点要求不充分的实例，1对话题的不熟悉不能真实反映测试者的语言水平；2试题难度的不一致导致对测验结果的延续性和可靠性产生质疑。需要看清楚的是，雅思已成一种商业化的考试，催生了一个产业。

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作者: 微博评论 时间: 2011-5-16 02:47
回复 @郑仁强:牛了逼的哈哈，还有，有同学下午上您的课时反映犯困

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作者: 微博评论 时间: 2011-5-16 10:43
回复@雅思中国网:恩，可能因为我上课不讲废话和笑话吧，每分钟都会有知识含量，体力一般的人会有点累呵呵

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作者: 叼着根烟打Dota 时间: 2012-7-19 08:57
感觉应该是8以上的啊

作者: 换个名字换心情 时间: 2012-8-19 21:53
这篇才7.5？！写得太好了！

作者: Ash怎么了 时间: 2012-10-15 21:16
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