请雅思哥或者作文好的同学帮忙修改下我写的作文，谢谢。

本人快考雅思了，心里非常着急，作文不知道怎么样，所以在这里求助各位大牛，大家在帮忙改正的基础上能给个评定也可以。小女非常感激！
题目：the tendency of news reports focus on the problems and emergencies rather than positive development is harmful to individual and to society. To what extent do you agree or disagree。
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正文：Nowadays, the news reports tend to focus on the problems and emergencies, some people believe that it does harm to individuals and society, but others concerned that it is useful for human beings knowing about the issue of society, and people could protect themselves.

2 \; m+ w: C- J+ ]the objective reports of our society may attract terrify and it also enables individuals not to trust the government . On the other word, the government is untrustworthy. But on the other hand, the bad influential realistic news will make individuals pay attention to the hidden trouble. For instance, the safety of food, transportation safety, health problems and so forth. The problems and emergencies can rise people’s awareness of safety. That is the best way for human beings get a clear perspective of our society.

While, the positive reports keep individuals feeling safe and stable. Human beings are still believe that they have a n excellent government. It is beneficial to the government, but it runs contrary to the realistic phenomenon of society. They hide the truth from the residents. Once the issues occurred, the government will lose the trust of people.
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As far as I am concerned, the news should be based on realistic, not for the sake of beautifying our society, even the news is objective, but it enables us to know our country very well.
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真心地建议，如果是4月21日考，一， 一定要仔细把关，确保写出的都是完整句；二，尽量减少双谓语的句子，使用非谓语或者从句处理。。。。。。。。。背背范文吧，不要太复杂的。我不忙就帮你了。

duoduoshaoshao1 发表于 2012-4-16 22:36
4 H( U  m0 i0 l2 q2 _真心地建议，如果是4月21日考，一， 一定要仔细把关，确保写出的都是完整句；二，尽量减少双谓语的句子，使 ...

: E3 r* ?( Q7 U' \- C之前背了点慎小嶷的作文，最后放弃了，想自己写作文。毕竟不是自己写的东西，记忆下来非常难。希望能帮下我，好迷茫。

duoduoshaoshao1 发表于 2012-4-16 22:36
真心地建议，如果是4月21日考，一， 一定要仔细把关，确保写出的都是完整句；二，尽量减少双谓语的句子，使 ...

还有就是我语法不好。

优化人生 发表于 2012-4-17 16:29
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我里面有什么写的不对的希望朋友能帮忙指正。

大概5.5样子，没细看

:'(这个是我写的最好的作文啊。。。

雅思哥 发表于 2012-4-18 20:07
9 W4 W( {% C+ C. O& }0 ~7 g7 X大概5.5样子，没细看

' ~4 R% O' \# n4 M7 H 我该怎么办？这个是我写的最好的呀，别的烂的就别提了。。

四个板块最苦手的就是作文和口语OTZ